Where I’d Rather Be
My heart lies
in the impossible truth
of freedom and curiosity.
Where ocean waves encompass my bare feet,
trying to pull me back with them, into the water and
into unknowns and the horizon,
which seems like it is always just out of the reach of my hand.
My heart dreams
of finding the unblazed trail
which I can travel for days and days.
Where my fears and my worries
won’t be able to keep up with me,
because I’ll finally feel unstoppable
in a place which I can call my own.
But sadly, that life is an impossible truth.
Because as the waves try to pull my feet in,
they turn and walk the other way instead
Since my parents say it’s getting late and we have to leave,
and I can’t find a trail to blaze since my entire day is possessed by school,
and I don’t question the way things are because I’ve never known another way.
So I guess my heart has to wait.And wait.
Your use of enjambment and end-stopped lines really added to the poem. The pauses I could interpolate from the text were very powerful and contributed a lot to the poem.
ReplyDeleteYour word choice and sensory detail is really good. I also like the central message.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the way you showed the comparison between what you want and what life actually gives. The words you chose helped show how you feel and you used poetic devices really well.
ReplyDeleteI like how this is a expectations versus reality poem. You truly compared all this to life and had my attention through the whole poem.
ReplyDeleteI like how this is a expectations versus reality poem. You truly compared all this to life and had my attention through the whole poem.
ReplyDeleteI can really connect to this poem, and I'm guessing so can a lot of other people. I feel the same way that you do. Even though I want to do fun, exciting new things, I can't because of school and diving and parents. This poem evokes a lot of emotion in a very good way.
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