Family
Friends will always be good
but not the best
which is why there is family
What I know to be true is that my family is like a church because they support me and give me love that I can never take away.
When I was little I never thought of it much, but my dad always made it a priority to come to all my sports games making him like health insurance: always there when you need it.
He would yell and shout, which I would always resent but I came to appreciate
My Mother on the other hand cooks meals and treats me with care every moment
My brother always keep me company.
Friends will be close, then drift away, but a brother is forever
We may fight but it will all pass because We. Are. Brothers
The rest of my family is like a phone because they are always at my side and I can call them if I am ever in need.
My friends are like a car.
A car is very useful but not needed.
They are there most of the time but every once in a while they need a tune up and fixing.
Family is not an important thing it is everything
What is know to be true may be small, but I know it is like a pen.
There is only so much ink
so...
make.
it.
last.
Keenan - I really enjoyed your poem - it is very relate-able and uses many of the poetic devices that we talked about in class. I like your use of periods for emphasis We. Are. Brothers. It was a good idea on your part. the tree image works. One suggestion - your lines are kind of long, you should use the "enter" key whenever you have an idea change. then break up your poem into stanzas.
ReplyDeleteI really like your poem it has strong poetic-devices that make the poem stand out to me. Try to split the poem into stanzas though. Overall, it's a very strong poem.
ReplyDeleteIt's a very nice, funny and happy poem. I like how you compared "family" to a pen. Your family members would be pleased to read this.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is amazing. The comparisons are mind blowing and the wording and phrasing are great. Overall it is a very impressive poem that got me to smile.
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